Thread:GlacialVortex/@comment-22439-20160726231405/@comment-6697950-20160727102147

As Mamue said, this message is automatically sent to any new user on the wiki. The automated system uses the profile of a random admin to post this message so that the selected admin would be notified if the new user had questions. Aside from the fact that a welcome message feels better when there's a face behind it instead of just a bot.

Anyway, as for your edit, I looked over it and did find some problems. For starters, I have no idea why on earth did you contract some words. We specifically endorse the opposite to be done - all articles should be written in formal style while contractions are only suited for casual writing. I'm not really sure why you capitalised "event" either, but that's not as big of an issue.

The biggest issue I found was that you overdid it on splitting long sentences into smaller ones. Some of the sentences did deserve to be split, but with some sentences, you basically added a break mid-clause and broke the link between the ideas. For example:

"Although after breaking his seal, Eugeo did start to show signs of strengthening his resolve, as he no longer doubted as much when asked whether he was ready to continue towards the cathedral"

The "as he no longer doubted [...]" part was an example of how his resolve had become stronger.

"[...] which was due to the fact he no longer doubted himself. Soon after he was asked whether he was ready to continue towards the cathedral."

In this case, there isn't any obvious link between the two. Actually, the new sentence you created goes off topic then, since it just states an event instead of explaining how it relates to his personality.