Thread:Wikiwalker11291/@comment-6697950-20161223104531

I'm currently reviewing your and Reshiram's edits on the Premiere article and I've come to notice that half of your summary is either about Kirito or Asuna... not Premiere whom the article is meant for... if there's something important that you need to mention, then please incorporate it in a way that the focus remains on Premiere. Otherwise, a summary that mostly focuses on what Asuna and Kirito are thinking isn't what we should care about on an article for another character.

P.S. Please stop overusing "and". You can use it once every so often, but using it several times in a row is just poor style. There are plenty of grammatical structures that you can employ for a less boring summary. 