Thread:Freedom Wall/@comment-6697950-20150414210734

I've reviewed your latest edits. I appreciate that you're helping the wiki by both adding new content and improving the style of existing content. Though, while reviewing your Kirito edit, I've noticed that you added a sentence "It is noted, however, that Kirito once again did not use his dual wield in the battle." Such a sentence sounds like you're trying to defend a character for losing, thus it sounds rather partial. You can be partial on the forums, but on articles, you should try to maintain a more neutral viewpoint. You can mention the fact that he wasn't dual wielding, but you shouldn't emphasise it too much to avoid making it sound like justification.

And yes, I'm pretty sure that there are quite a few articles that already sound like that (I personally avoid cleaning old and large articles like Kirito, since it's both big and really messy, so too much work to be done). If you notice such articles, please either mark them for cleanup or, if you have the time, correct the style of writing yourself, as it's definitely not how an article should be written. 