Thread:Wikiwalker11291/@comment-6697950-20170505104630/@comment-6697950-20170505192104

Making significant progress is all well and good. Making a significant unnecessary workload is another thing. It's fine when you write a summary, but it's not so fine when you write a retelling and I have to spend an hour or more thinking of how I could actually summarise it. That's one of the reasons why I asked you to limit your contributions per day - to encourage you to spend less time on quantity and instead focus more on the quality. After all, by spending more time considering what's actually important, you could cover more with less, thus making the same or even more progress than by just retelling everything without any limitations (and you'd be making it easier for me to review the content to boot).

From what I've seen on the Nezha page, that's the biggest issue with your edits. Your style is more or less fine, I don't find much of any grammar errors (I do find some ambiguities and stuff from time to time, but that's nothing out of the ordinary). However, you do have an issue with how much detail you're describing.

Some simple rules of thumb: These are some of the rules of thumb I used during my recent reviews.
 * 1) If you can remove something and there's no change to the big picture (i.e. with or without it, everything else makes enough sense and there's enough context and transition between each event), then it's likely not all that important. If it's something you REALLY think is important or really interesting, keep it as concise as possible.
 * 2) Other characters should only be mentioned as much as you need them for context. Any further details should be reserved for more relevant pages.
 * 3) If a single sentence is the size of half or more of the paragraph, it's probably too long. Same goes for more than ~3 clauses per sentence.
 * 4) If a paragraph looks awfully big compared to the others, it should either be split, if there's a good place to do it, or shortened.

P.S. I haven't touched your PV2 summaries, since Haffen promised to go through them first to reduce my workload, but for the record, the page is currently at 78,825 bytes in size (it's the third largest article on the wiki at the moment), while the next largest volume article (v6) is 46,061 bytes in size... so your summary is about twice the size of the norm and you're not even done yet.