Thread:Maitkarro/@comment-6697950-20151115000513

I've reviewed your changes on the Lost Song page and noticed a few issues with your style. I'd like to point them out in hopes that this will help you with your future edits.


 * All content on an article should be impersonal. There should be no "we" or any other personal pronoun on an article.
 * Instead of using "you", it's better to use "the player" or any other similar expression, as "you" is awfully informal.
 * Brackets should not be used for long expressions/sentences. They should only be used for quickly providing short bits of information, like alternative names. Anything longer should be connected to the rest of the sentence using some grammatical structure.
 * Use full stops when you've finished an idea. Making large sentences complicates the flow.
 * Please avoid contractions like "can't" and the like. Full forms should be used on articles.

Oh, and are the controls the same for all consoles? If not, you should mark which consoles the controls apply to and provide the equivalents for other consoles if possible. 