Thread:Gsimenas/@comment-6697950-20130319140815/@comment-6021376-20130407211039

Ok, I'm just gonna do this part by part or I'll lose my train of thought.

I feel like the first sentence is a bit too wordy and therefor makes it harder to read and comprehend, it would be best to cut it into two sentences.

In the background part I feel like the first bit wasn't needed and you should reference who said that (can't remember off the top of my head).

Ok ummmmm be careful when using words separated to two commas. How that is meant to be used is you take a full sentence, split it, add an independent clause in and it that clause doesn't flow onto the end of the first part and the start of the second part you add the two commas. An example of this is the first sentEnce in history and developement. Read the sentence to yourself and express the commas. It would read something like this. "To create a truly adaptive. bottom up AI, replicating..." It doesn't sound right because bottom up AI flows onto the first part and is part of that idea, hence you don't need the first comma