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 * I believe that a proper translation for "ano" would be "say,"
 * The first letter of a sentence as well as names is always capitalised.
 * ツッコミ is read as Tsukkomi, but I have no idea what it is supposed to mean in this context (I don't know what that word means in general though).
 * "old-date RPG" - you are using it in plural, thus you need to add an "s", i.e. RPGs
 * "But damage value in SAO won't be shown directly, and have to calculate backward from opponent's HP loss." -> "But the (missing article) damage value in SAO won't be shown directly, thus you (connects reason to result) have to calculate it based on the (counting backwards sounds awkward) opponent's HP loss.
 * "Then this time let..." -> let's
 * ten, ten thousnad... -> thousand (typo)
 * "Go to find Lisbeth to let her produce various type of high-bonus equipment, and then ask Silica come to let Pina use Supportive breathe(<--what is this skill's common ENglish translation?) to increase status..." -> We have to (missing a subject, "have" sounds more suitable), types (again, plural = adds "s"), ...ask Silica to come... (you need to use infinitive with to here), use its Supportive Breath (typo; I've only heard Pina having "Bubble Breath" though) to increase our (you have to say whose) stats (more suitable word)
 * ma, then might be it's better to use Miss. Euriel's whip to let opponent enter freezing condition, and then...." -> then it might be better (or "then maybe it would be better") to use miss Euriel's (Yulier's ?) whip to freeze the (missing article, sounds simpler and better) opponent and then...

Some of my comments and corrections. Your most common mistakes are: leaving out the subject, not adding articles (a, an, the) to singular nouns and not adding "s" at the end of a plural noun.